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Broken, by Britta Benson

Picture credit: Britta Benson

Here is my response to ‘The Procrastinators’ Midweek Writing Prompt. https://theprocrastinators58220236.wordpress.com/2022/03/09/midweek-writing-prompt-broken/

I actually like the prompt sentence ‘Only I could have broken you like this’ and feel it could be a poem on its own. So here are my two versions. Short and not quite so short. What do you think? Which one is stronger?

Broken

Only I

could have

broken you

like this.

Broken

Only I

could have

broken you like this,

clunk,

abruptly cut

your core in half,

in one clean line,

edgeless, bare,

instantly seared,

leaving you

no way back

into wholesomeness,

for smooth,

bloodless wounds

can never heal.

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6 thoughts on “Broken, by Britta Benson

    1. Oh, but there’s nothing as beautiful as a good long ramble!!! I think the trick is finding a balance. Long and short, new and old. Bit of both. And I do love your poem, especially read by you. I could listen to your voice until the cows come home. PS: I don’t have cows. Just thought I’d better make this clear. It’s just an expression I like very, very much.

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