
Here’s my response to this week’s W3 poetry challenge. The prompt: Write a poem including the words ‘sovereign’ and ‘rights’.
You can read the full blog post here, including Amy (Gypsie) Offenbacher-Ferris’ poem ‘Thunderstorm Magic’: https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/06/29/w3-prompt-9-weave-written-weekly/
Here goes, my take:
Before speaking I take for granted too many rights that came easy, long before breath. Debts, as yet unpaid. With my lack of lefts, I lollop, limp, keep myself upright, as best I cannot. I barely scrape the cleaner surfaces as I progress, far too scared, and who knows what lurks, once the questions start. I look, I listen, left, right, then left again, a wobble, squint. I, sovereign creature, or so I pretend as is customary, I hobble, shuffle, compensate for what I’m not, not yet and maybe never. I wait, deep into the silence of my days. I wait. Nobody’s coming. I tilt, head above heart, I straighten my spine, jerk my soul into my mouth. I spill. This is my time. Ready or not.
A marvellous description of something many of us have experienced. Well done!
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Thanks, Peter. Much appreciated.
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Bravo! The tottering and leaning that I experience is so well reflected in this poem!! I am awed and enamored!
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Thanks so much. Glad you enjoyed it.
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This poem and this stanza in particular is amazing!
❤
David
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Thanks for your lovely comment, David. Much appreciated.
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Hi Britta , I was struck speechless as I read your very artfully constructed poem. Your gift is descriptively succinct and refreshing. 😊
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Gypsie-Ami, much appreciated!
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You are very welcome Britt! 😊
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Reblogged this on johncoyote and commented:
Please read the amazing poetry.
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I loved your work dear Britta. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you very much for your lovely comment, John, much appreciated.
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You are welcome dear Britta.
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Loving the atmosphere and flow of this poetic word!
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Jaya. Much appreciated.
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Well done.
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Thank you, Molly.
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